DW Drabble

[elisi]

So, life is sort-of kind-of back to normal. And... I wrote a drabble! Maybe it should have been a ficlet, because 100 words restricts everything, but I think it just about works. And I don't have time for anything more...

Title: A Promise Kept.
Summary: Amy and the Doctor talk about River.
Characters: Amy, Eleven.
Rating: U
Length: 100 words precisely in Appleworks.
Setting: Some time post-A Good Man Goes To War, hence SPOILERS!



A Promise Kept.

“Doctor. About River...”

He stops fiddling, slowly meets her eyes.

“She’s... she’s my little Melody. And she grows up to... marry you. Or near enough. Plus she’s in prison and...”

Her voices catches.

“They stole her once. And life with you - you’re so dangerous. And I-”

He reaches out, cradles her cheek, and in his eyes are dark, painful shadows - just like those that show up whenever he talks of his people.

But when he speaks it is with absolute conviction.

“Amy, listen. I promise you this: I will always be there to catch her. Always.”

She nods.

“You’d better.”

Comments

[owlboy]

<3333 lovely

[elisi]

Thank you. I have a lot of THOUGHTS (most of which will be poured into my review/meta, once I get round to writing it), but this particular issue worked much better as a fic. <3

[owlboy]

I think I remember a conversation where you said it was difficult for you to write drabbles, but this is just perfect. I can see them having a big hug-fest after.

YAY META

[elisi]

I think I remember a conversation where you said it was difficult for you to write drabbles
Heh. I consider 5000 words *short*...

but this is just perfect.
Aw, thank you.

I can see them having a big hug-fest after.
:)

YAY META
Sh! I'm not supposed to be here...

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

“Amy, listen. I promise you this: I will always be there to catch her. Always.”


This was heartbreaking and gorgeaus, like the promise he made to protect her in AGMGTW:)

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

I added you to my flist, if that's okay? If not, I'll delete you off my flist.

[elisi]

Oh please, you're more than welcome! Here, have a cup of tea and make yourself at home! :)

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

thank you :)

[elisi]

My pleasure. I like new friends. :)

ETA: Btw, the 'Oh please' above was meant in a 'oh please do!' rather than a weird backwards dismissive way. Darn all this typing where you can't catch inflections. /o\

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

It's okay, I do it all the time. Pesky typos :P

[elisi]

They are evil.

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

Extremely evil! I think we need Darcy to banish them with his quill, like he's doing with your icon!

[elisi]

LOL! If only it were so easy... (Here's Gwen with a rocket launcher!)

[elisi]

This was heartbreaking and gorgeaus, like the promise he made to protect her in AGMGTW:)
Aw, thank you. But this promise is one he knows that he keeps. ♥ (Oh River, why so beautiful and tragic? Um - at some point I will manage to carve out time to write a big review/meta/essay on S6 and Moffat Who so far... There's just so much there.)

[arwen-elen.livejournal.com]

When River first met the Doctor, I was on the fence about here. But now I love her :) I think she's awesome and she kicks ass :) She's sassy but has a soft side. I hope the Moff shows the Doctor zooming off to find the lost girl she was. It would be lovely to see it and she's wistful about it as well, when she tells Rory about how this mad man fell out of the sky and he knew everything about her, and what an impact it made on a young girl; and how Rory is actually her father is sort of heartbreaking as well :/ he doesn't know that she is his daughter at this point.

An essay would be interesting to read, because as you say there is so much to write on Season 6 :)

[elisi]

Am kinda running out the door, but if you're interested in meta, then I've got some already - although now of course I need to re-assess everything what with knowing who River is... Anyway, you might like these:

Hello Sweetie: A Doctor/River Essay (written post-S5)

Thoughts on The Impossible Astronaut

Meta heavy review of Day of the Moon

[caliente-uk.livejournal.com]

Aww, this is so perfect! :)

[elisi]

Thank you. <3

[promethia_tenk]

Drabble! I think you made the right choice. The central point is so very arresting and poignant--you don't want to loose it in more words : ) You've reminded me of that delicious shock that came with ToA, when you first sat down and really worked through the implications of that opening sequence.

And I love that you used Amy for this. Everybody's been writing scenes like this with Rory, but . . . Amy! I miss their relationship, and I feel like there's all sorts of extra layers and weight between them that you don't have between the Doctor and Rory.

[elisi]

Drabble! I think you made the right choice. The central point is so very arresting and poignant--you don't want to loose it in more words : )
Yes, those were my feelings too. I would have liked 50 or so more words, but I managed. :)

You've reminded me of that delicious shock that came with ToA, when you first sat down and really worked through the implications of that opening sequence.
Which was indeed the inspiration!

And I love that you used Amy for this. Everybody's been writing scenes like this with Rory, but . . . Amy! I miss their relationship, and I feel like there's all sorts of extra layers and weight between them that you don't have between the Doctor and Rory.
It really had to be Amy. (Fishfingers and custard.) Rory, in this instance, is the outsider, the confidant, but Amy is the one at the heart - the one who was a little girl, let down by the Doctor, and who chose Rory. But River, so very clearly, chooses the Doctor, always, and Amy must want to make sure that he'll not let her down. (And now I'm thinking of Rose, and the possibility of Amy having heard her story, and not wanting a similar fate for River...)

[promethia_tenk]

I would have liked 50 or so more words, but I managed. :)
You know, I don't think I've ever written a proper drabble? the HIMYM community was supremely unconcerned with the technicalities, so "drabble" to me still mostly means "short fic." But then I don't really need any encouragement to write tersely ; )

Amy is the one at the heart - the one who was a little girl, let down by the Doctor, and who chose Rory. But River, so very clearly, chooses the Doctor, always, and Amy must want to make sure that he'll not let her down.
Mmmm, well put.

(And now I'm thinking of Rose, and the possibility of Amy having heard her story, and not wanting a similar fate for River...)
Huh--you know, I think I could see that? I mean, apparently Eleven's been fairly chatty about the Time War, so I could see Rose coming up and him actually talking about her in a fairly straightforward way.

[elisi]

You know, I don't think I've ever written a proper drabble? the HIMYM community was supremely unconcerned with the technicalities, so "drabble" to me still mostly means "short fic."
Funny how that works. The Buffy fandom tends towards '100 words PRECISELY!!!'

But then I don't really need any encouragement to write tersely ; )
No. I wouldn't say so. ;)

Huh--you know, I think I could see that? I mean, apparently Eleven's been fairly chatty about the Time War, so I could see Rose coming up and him actually talking about her in a fairly straightforward way.
Now I want to read that fic. Plus, a fair number of companions end up dead or worse. I think Amy must worry...

[kerkevik.livejournal.com]

Hi,

nice to see that you can write drabbles. Until I wrote that first one; immediately prior to joining lj, IIRC, I didn't think I could write anything that didn't threaten to make War and Peace look like an office memo :-)

I think Rory would just stare him in the eye and the Doctor would know everything he needed to know about his fate re: Rory is the Beast gif, I sent you :-)

Like it, btw.

Long Live Wee!Amelia and her Raggedy Men,
Ray.

[elisi]

I have written the occasional drabble before this, but it's not the norm.

I didn't think I could write anything that didn't threaten to make War and Peace look like an office memo :-)
Heee! I'm good at that too! :)

I think Rory would just stare him in the eye and the Doctor would know everything he needed to know about his fate re: Rory is the Beast gif, I sent you :-)
Yes, rather. Although the female of the species is more deadly...

[humansrsuperior.livejournal.com]

Awwwwww!! I LOVE IT. *mems* ♥

[elisi]

Yay! Thank you! ♥

[endeni]

Oh, lovely! *_* The perfect tag to a A Good Man Goes To War.

[elisi]

Thank you. And it's nice for the Doctor to - for once - be able to make a promise he knows he can keep/will have kept.

[kateydidnt.livejournal.com]

*sniff* *sniff* Its my allergies, really it is...

You made me melt again! Beautiful.

[elisi]

Darn allergies, they should be banned!

By which I mean thank you. ♥

[cinderbella333.livejournal.com]

This was a really lovely drabble and you worked very well within the construct of 100 words. And it really adds to the canon. Great piece.

[elisi]

Thank you, thank you, thank you. it was one of those things that I suddenly needed to write, and a drabble seemed to fit - I am prone to wordyness, so forcing myself to stay on topic was good.

[aerintine.livejournal.com]

This was perfect. Amy is perfect. Eleven is perfect. Sigh. Well done.

[elisi]

Awww, thank you. ♥

[independence1776]

I love this! It makes my heart break at the same time I want to cheer. It's so them.

[elisi]

♥ That's pretty much exactly what I was going for. :)

[joking.livejournal.com]

I finally saw AGMGTW today, and this was the perfect coda. TBH I was very disappointed by the finale, plot-wise, but the emotional notes were good and this drabble touched on the parts of the episode that really resonated with me.

[elisi]

I finally saw AGMGTW today, and this was the perfect coda.
♥ Thank you.

TBH I was very disappointed by the finale, plot-wise, but the emotional notes were good and this drabble touched on the parts of the episode that really resonated with me.
I am planning on writing a big meta post at some point (I've got notes, but no time yet), so we can talk then! :)

[someidiot.livejournal.com]

Aw, cute. :) I like it! And the best part is, it still works post-S6!

[elisi]

Thank you! :) And hey, we know how she dies, and that the Doctor catches her that one last time, so it's a promise he knows he's kept!

I love them so much it is RIDICULOUS!

[someidiot.livejournal.com]

Haha, yes, me too! Although I would have loved a season or two where River was a legit villain, maybe playing a role like the Master did in some of the earlier seasons, and we could giggle about the sexual tension because we KNOW how it's going to end. I feel like LKH was... rushed.

Then again, it probably wouldn't have worked as well if Melody had found out about "River Song" any other time than when she first met the Doctor.

Either way, yes, River/Doctor is pretty awesome. And it feels a lot less forced than Rose did. >_>;;

[elisi]

Haha, yes, me too! Although I would have loved a season or two where River was a legit villain, maybe playing a role like the Master did in some of the earlier seasons, and we could giggle about the sexual tension because we KNOW how it's going to end. I feel like LKH was... rushed.
LKH was rushed, but it did work, so... I'm not complaining. What I want, actually, is for the Master to come back, just so River can run rings around him.

Either way, yes, River/Doctor is pretty awesome. And it feels a lot less forced than Rose did. >_>;;
Well Rose was that head-over-heels love-at-first-sight kinda love (which did develop, credit where credit's due), but it's very different from the kind of long term love/hate/married thing the Doctor & River have going on. Like I said in my meta, River is a combination of Rose & the Master, and it's like cryptonite for our dear Doctor...

[someidiot.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I would love that. Honestly, I'm kind of suspicious that Rory might be the Master (Or the Doctor, or Stormageddon), but surely the creators wouldn't sneak the chameleon arch in there twice, would they? ...Especially not Moffat, since RTD already used it a bunch... right? xD;;

TBH I would like to see how Moffat handles the Master. After seeing Delgado's performance, I didn't much like the way RTD wrote him.

The way I see it, Rose was more that teenage/high school romance. Like "I love you and this is gonna last forever!" and then she moves away to college and they never see each other again. I think that's why so many younger fans identify with it and swear by Rose/Doctor, because it feels like the romance they see in movies and in school and all over their lives, instead of a more in-depth, long-term "adult" romance like Doctor/River.

[elisi]

Honestly, I'm kind of suspicious that Rory might be the Master
Nope. Not in a million years. Sorry. :)

TBH I would like to see how Moffat handles the Master. After seeing Delgado's performance, I didn't much like the way RTD wrote him.
... This is obviously a personal thing, but I could totally spend forever watching John Simm and David Tennant flirting. *cough* (This is even funnier now we have River...)

The way I see it, Rose was more that teenage/high school romance. Like "I love you and this is gonna last forever!" and then she moves away to college and they never see each other again.
You've seen Sandcastles in the Sand, right?