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Moar New fic!
The show is KILLING me, so I’m writing crack!fic. And discovered that Eleven is interesting and a little tricky to write, but very rewarding, and that Amy is the most fun to write ever! (Oh Amy, I ♥ you too much for words!) Also I love how, just by being their fabulous selves, they come across as completely mad. :) Rory of course is a sweetheart, and River continues to be awesome, because that's just the way she rolls.
Also - many thank you's to![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
kathyh for the thumbs up! Chapter 1 here.
I hope you enjoy! \o/ <- that is my Eleventy impression. ;)
Title: And Then The TARDIS Fell Into Pete’s World.
Rating: PG
Characters: TenToo, Rose, Eleven, Amy, Rory, River. (Possibly more as the story progresses.)
Genre: AU crack!fic.
Spoilers: The Big Bang. (All of S5!)
Summary: The TARDIS falls into Pete’s World. Stuff happens. (I don’t know yet. It’s a thing in progress. Respect the thing.)
Wordcount: Approx 1600 words.
Chapter 2
Rose, speechless and incredulous, slowly turned to her Doctor, waiting for the inevitable outburst that she knew was coming. The odd traces of Donna-ness in his nature were often a headache, but right now she was looking forward to the verbal dressing-down that would surely follow.
Except he didn’t look ready to shout at anyone - quite the opposite in fact. He was staring at the mysterious woman as if he’d seen a ghost, face pale and voice almost shaking as he whispered, “River?”
River chuckled appreciatively.
“The one and only. But - we’re in a bit of a fix, and apparently you’re rather... handy!”
She raised an eyebrow and let her eyes travel over the Doctor in a way that made Rose want to shake her.
Then she abruptly turned and fixed her eyes on Rose.
“And you must be Rose - I’ve heard all about you!”
She blinked. “You have?”
“Oh absolutely. Doctor River Song by the way. It’s an honour.”
She held out a hand, and Rose shook it automatically, her antagonism turning to confusion.
Then River shifted to the side.
“But come in! Although I should probably warn you - it’s bigger on the inside!”
She winked, so self-assured and teasing that Rose couldn’t help glaring as she stepped over the threshold - only to be stopped in her tracks by the sight that greeted her. It was bigger. Huge, as a matter of fact, with gleaming copper-like walls and a new time rotor and levels and stairs...
Stairs. At the top of which stood a gangly, odd-looking young man, with a floppy fringe and a bow tie, arms spread out wide like he was the Y in a rendition of YMCA. Next to him were a young man and woman, leaning against the railings, but the peculiar one was the one who demanded their attention.
“Benevenuto! Welcome!” he exclaimed, before ambling down the stairs, beaming.
“Oh the looks on your faces! This. is. priceless!”
Rose stared, mind oddly blank.
“...Doctor?”
The next second she found herself and her own Doctor wrapped up in a big hug.
“That’s me! Oh, it is good to see you!” the odd New Doctor said, pulling back - one hand on Rose’s shoulder, and one on her Doctor’s - looking from one to the other, eyes bright and curious and happy, as if they’d never been brown and silently longing...
“So how are you? Married? Children? How long has it been for you?”
“’Bout two years?” Rose’s Doctor replied, completely unfazed. “And married, yes, children, no - although we have talked about it...”
He turned his head, catching Rose’s eyes, and smiled in that way that made her feel like all the air had been sucked out of her.
A small incredulous noise escaped River.
“OK now I believe he’s human!” she said, shaking her head, disbelief written all over her face, and looking at Rose’s Doctor like he had suddenly grown another head.
The New Doctor just laughed.
“Excellent. I have to admit I was a tiny bit worried whether you’d manage to work things out, but it is lovely to see how well you’re doing. Which reminds me-”
He took a step back, hands in pockets, and stood up as tall as he could, obviously posing.
“What do you think? Still not ginger, of course, but not bad overall I think you’ll agree. And the ears stayed a decent size!”
Rose looked him over and tried to find the right words - words that didn’t include ‘I am now even more painfully, impossibly, grateful that you didn’t regenerate last time we met and I suddenly love my Doctor even more than before...’, when thankfully her Doctor came to the rescue, pulling one of those ‘Time to tread carefully’ faces that he usually only used when talking to her mother.
“Um... Not bad. Very youthful, although no vegetable this time...”
He was cut off when the New Doctor abruptly cut in.
“Ah! A Timey-Wimey Detector!”
“New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector, actually,” Rose’s Doctor said, holding it up, and the New Doctor grasped it excitedly.
“Ve-ry clever! Does it go ping when there’s stuff?”
Rose’s Doctor did his side-to-side head-bop thing, as he tried to work out a reply.
“Weeeell, it’s more a sort of a ‘bung’, really. But you see I added light up buttons and a screen, so it’s much more specific - we’ve managed to catch up with about 98% of time travellers since I got it up and running...”
The New Doctor started looking it over, almost cooing as he nodded along to Rose’s Doctor’s explanations, until a not-very-subtle cough behind him caught his attention.
“So Doctor, are we just going to stand here all day, or are you actually going to introduce us?”
The young couple had descended the stairs, and the girl - a determined-looking redhead with a Scottish accent and a very short mini skirt - was obviously getting impatient. The new Doctor waved the New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector around.
“Yes of course. Sorry. Sorry. Amy, Rory - please say hello to Rose Tyler and the Doctor. Doctor, Rose - this is Amy and Rory Pond.”
“Nice to meet you,” Rose said, trying to smile and suddenly knowing exactly how Sarah Jane had felt, and Amy nodded a polite and somewhat stifled, “You too!” and then there was a general shaking of hands all around, before Amy turned to New Doctor again, eyes narrowing.
“So - how come you never mentioned that you have a half-human clone of a previous you living in a parallel world?”
The New Doctor looked a little bashful and defensive.
“Well it... never came up until now. Nine hundred and seven, remember. I’ve been a lot of people and a lot of things have happened to me.”
Amy seemed to accept this, then tilted her head, studying Rose’s Doctor.
“But seriously, that’s what you used to look like? Really?”
She looked rather sceptical, and the New Doctor nodded, before suddenly trying to hit himself on the forehead and nearly getting a face full of New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector. Looking at it stupidly for a moment he tossed it at River with a “Catch!”, which she did flawlessly and then started making appreciative noises as she began examining it.
But the New Doctor clapped his hands together and then nearly stabbed Rose’s Doctor in the chest.
“Take off your jacket!”
“What?”
“Go on - trust me!”
The New Doctor’s eyes were brimming with excitement, and after a moment Rose’s Doctor pulled off his jacket, clearly trying to work out where his other self was going with this and not being able to.
Taking the jacket out of his hands the New Doctor threw out his other arm towards Rose’s Doctor with ‘Look at me, aren’t I clever?’ written all over his face (an expression that apparently didn’t change from body to body) and announced:
“And I give you... The Raggedy Doctor. Except minus the Raggedy!”
This made no sense whatsoever to Rose, but the effect on Amy and Rory was unmistakable. Amy threw a hand over her mouth, her eyes widening quite improbably, and Rory looked shellshocked, pointing at Rose’s Doctor with a shaky finger.
“OK, that is... freaky. And kinda creepy. And... and weird. How-”
Amy wasn’t listening. Instead she was circling Rose’s Doctor, studying him like he was some strange new creature never seen before.
“Doctor. Explain!” she then demanded, and the New Doctor smiled at her.
“Well I crashed into your garden mere moments after I regenerated. Still cooking, remember? The clothes got torn because the TARDIS started to break apart.”
“So those were the clothes you died in?” Amy asked, looking from one Doctor to the other, and the New Doctor pulled an impatient sort of face.
“Well if you want to macabre about it, yes.”
“How...?” Rose’s Doctor cut in, eyes dark and sympathetic, and the New Doctor looked at him silently for a long moment before answering.
“Radiation.”
Rose’s Doctor winced. “Again?”
“Again?” Rose echoed, and the New Doctor sighed.
“Look we are not getting in to all the ways in which I died, understood? It’s... not important.”
Rose nodded, somewhat taken aback at the brusque tone. Much more like her first Doctor, when he’d been in a mood...
“Actually,” Amy said, “if I may change the subject? How come you were re-born... or... ‘regenererated’, whatever, without a dress sense? I thought it was just an alien thing, but clearly that’s not the case.”
“I’m sorry?” the New Doctor asked, looking genuinely puzzled.
“He-” she pointed at Rose’s Doctor, “-is a fox! You dress like a Geography teacher!”
“She’s right, you know,” River remarked, looking up briefly before getting distracted again by what was clearly her favourite new toy.
“Bow ties are cool!” The New Doctor announced breezily and authoritatively, as Rose’s Doctor smiled smugly (such a peacock!), and Amy rolled her eyes and threw her hands up in the air, her frustration palpable.
“It’s not just the bow tie! It’s... everything. I mean you’ve got assets, you’re just not... showcasing them.”
“...assets?” Rose couldn’t help asking, and Amy raised an eyebrow.
“Oh you should see him naked. No really!”
Rose could feel her jaw drop as she stared incredulously at them both, barely registering River’s low chuckle.
“I’m sorry, what?”
Rory - that Rose had almost forgotten - coughed.
“He... was getting changed in a hurry, and there was nowhere to... well... And Amy...”
“Amy-” the girl in question cut in, “-doesn’t turn her back on a free show!”
Before Rose could think of an even half appropriate response to this, a dull, ominous clanging rang out.
She turned to her Doctor and they looked at each other in alarm, but the New Doctor merely held up a finger as if he’d been expecting this, and then proved that apparently he was incapable of speaking in anything except riddles as he smiled:
“And there we are. Five minutes to Belgium!”
Chapter 3.
Also - many thank you's to
kathyh for the thumbs up! Chapter 1 here.I hope you enjoy! \o/ <- that is my Eleventy impression. ;)
Title: And Then The TARDIS Fell Into Pete’s World.
Rating: PG
Characters: TenToo, Rose, Eleven, Amy, Rory, River. (Possibly more as the story progresses.)
Genre: AU crack!fic.
Spoilers: The Big Bang. (All of S5!)
Summary: The TARDIS falls into Pete’s World. Stuff happens. (I don’t know yet. It’s a thing in progress. Respect the thing.)
Wordcount: Approx 1600 words.
Rose, speechless and incredulous, slowly turned to her Doctor, waiting for the inevitable outburst that she knew was coming. The odd traces of Donna-ness in his nature were often a headache, but right now she was looking forward to the verbal dressing-down that would surely follow.
Except he didn’t look ready to shout at anyone - quite the opposite in fact. He was staring at the mysterious woman as if he’d seen a ghost, face pale and voice almost shaking as he whispered, “River?”
River chuckled appreciatively.
“The one and only. But - we’re in a bit of a fix, and apparently you’re rather... handy!”
She raised an eyebrow and let her eyes travel over the Doctor in a way that made Rose want to shake her.
Then she abruptly turned and fixed her eyes on Rose.
“And you must be Rose - I’ve heard all about you!”
She blinked. “You have?”
“Oh absolutely. Doctor River Song by the way. It’s an honour.”
She held out a hand, and Rose shook it automatically, her antagonism turning to confusion.
Then River shifted to the side.
“But come in! Although I should probably warn you - it’s bigger on the inside!”
She winked, so self-assured and teasing that Rose couldn’t help glaring as she stepped over the threshold - only to be stopped in her tracks by the sight that greeted her. It was bigger. Huge, as a matter of fact, with gleaming copper-like walls and a new time rotor and levels and stairs...
Stairs. At the top of which stood a gangly, odd-looking young man, with a floppy fringe and a bow tie, arms spread out wide like he was the Y in a rendition of YMCA. Next to him were a young man and woman, leaning against the railings, but the peculiar one was the one who demanded their attention.
“Benevenuto! Welcome!” he exclaimed, before ambling down the stairs, beaming.
“Oh the looks on your faces! This. is. priceless!”
Rose stared, mind oddly blank.
“...Doctor?”
The next second she found herself and her own Doctor wrapped up in a big hug.
“That’s me! Oh, it is good to see you!” the odd New Doctor said, pulling back - one hand on Rose’s shoulder, and one on her Doctor’s - looking from one to the other, eyes bright and curious and happy, as if they’d never been brown and silently longing...
“So how are you? Married? Children? How long has it been for you?”
“’Bout two years?” Rose’s Doctor replied, completely unfazed. “And married, yes, children, no - although we have talked about it...”
He turned his head, catching Rose’s eyes, and smiled in that way that made her feel like all the air had been sucked out of her.
A small incredulous noise escaped River.
“OK now I believe he’s human!” she said, shaking her head, disbelief written all over her face, and looking at Rose’s Doctor like he had suddenly grown another head.
The New Doctor just laughed.
“Excellent. I have to admit I was a tiny bit worried whether you’d manage to work things out, but it is lovely to see how well you’re doing. Which reminds me-”
He took a step back, hands in pockets, and stood up as tall as he could, obviously posing.
“What do you think? Still not ginger, of course, but not bad overall I think you’ll agree. And the ears stayed a decent size!”
Rose looked him over and tried to find the right words - words that didn’t include ‘I am now even more painfully, impossibly, grateful that you didn’t regenerate last time we met and I suddenly love my Doctor even more than before...’, when thankfully her Doctor came to the rescue, pulling one of those ‘Time to tread carefully’ faces that he usually only used when talking to her mother.
“Um... Not bad. Very youthful, although no vegetable this time...”
He was cut off when the New Doctor abruptly cut in.
“Ah! A Timey-Wimey Detector!”
“New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector, actually,” Rose’s Doctor said, holding it up, and the New Doctor grasped it excitedly.
“Ve-ry clever! Does it go ping when there’s stuff?”
Rose’s Doctor did his side-to-side head-bop thing, as he tried to work out a reply.
“Weeeell, it’s more a sort of a ‘bung’, really. But you see I added light up buttons and a screen, so it’s much more specific - we’ve managed to catch up with about 98% of time travellers since I got it up and running...”
The New Doctor started looking it over, almost cooing as he nodded along to Rose’s Doctor’s explanations, until a not-very-subtle cough behind him caught his attention.
“So Doctor, are we just going to stand here all day, or are you actually going to introduce us?”
The young couple had descended the stairs, and the girl - a determined-looking redhead with a Scottish accent and a very short mini skirt - was obviously getting impatient. The new Doctor waved the New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector around.
“Yes of course. Sorry. Sorry. Amy, Rory - please say hello to Rose Tyler and the Doctor. Doctor, Rose - this is Amy and Rory Pond.”
“Nice to meet you,” Rose said, trying to smile and suddenly knowing exactly how Sarah Jane had felt, and Amy nodded a polite and somewhat stifled, “You too!” and then there was a general shaking of hands all around, before Amy turned to New Doctor again, eyes narrowing.
“So - how come you never mentioned that you have a half-human clone of a previous you living in a parallel world?”
The New Doctor looked a little bashful and defensive.
“Well it... never came up until now. Nine hundred and seven, remember. I’ve been a lot of people and a lot of things have happened to me.”
Amy seemed to accept this, then tilted her head, studying Rose’s Doctor.
“But seriously, that’s what you used to look like? Really?”
She looked rather sceptical, and the New Doctor nodded, before suddenly trying to hit himself on the forehead and nearly getting a face full of New And Improved Timey-Wimey Detector. Looking at it stupidly for a moment he tossed it at River with a “Catch!”, which she did flawlessly and then started making appreciative noises as she began examining it.
But the New Doctor clapped his hands together and then nearly stabbed Rose’s Doctor in the chest.
“Take off your jacket!”
“What?”
“Go on - trust me!”
The New Doctor’s eyes were brimming with excitement, and after a moment Rose’s Doctor pulled off his jacket, clearly trying to work out where his other self was going with this and not being able to.
Taking the jacket out of his hands the New Doctor threw out his other arm towards Rose’s Doctor with ‘Look at me, aren’t I clever?’ written all over his face (an expression that apparently didn’t change from body to body) and announced:
“And I give you... The Raggedy Doctor. Except minus the Raggedy!”
This made no sense whatsoever to Rose, but the effect on Amy and Rory was unmistakable. Amy threw a hand over her mouth, her eyes widening quite improbably, and Rory looked shellshocked, pointing at Rose’s Doctor with a shaky finger.
“OK, that is... freaky. And kinda creepy. And... and weird. How-”
Amy wasn’t listening. Instead she was circling Rose’s Doctor, studying him like he was some strange new creature never seen before.
“Doctor. Explain!” she then demanded, and the New Doctor smiled at her.
“Well I crashed into your garden mere moments after I regenerated. Still cooking, remember? The clothes got torn because the TARDIS started to break apart.”
“So those were the clothes you died in?” Amy asked, looking from one Doctor to the other, and the New Doctor pulled an impatient sort of face.
“Well if you want to macabre about it, yes.”
“How...?” Rose’s Doctor cut in, eyes dark and sympathetic, and the New Doctor looked at him silently for a long moment before answering.
“Radiation.”
Rose’s Doctor winced. “Again?”
“Again?” Rose echoed, and the New Doctor sighed.
“Look we are not getting in to all the ways in which I died, understood? It’s... not important.”
Rose nodded, somewhat taken aback at the brusque tone. Much more like her first Doctor, when he’d been in a mood...
“Actually,” Amy said, “if I may change the subject? How come you were re-born... or... ‘regenererated’, whatever, without a dress sense? I thought it was just an alien thing, but clearly that’s not the case.”
“I’m sorry?” the New Doctor asked, looking genuinely puzzled.
“He-” she pointed at Rose’s Doctor, “-is a fox! You dress like a Geography teacher!”
“She’s right, you know,” River remarked, looking up briefly before getting distracted again by what was clearly her favourite new toy.
“Bow ties are cool!” The New Doctor announced breezily and authoritatively, as Rose’s Doctor smiled smugly (such a peacock!), and Amy rolled her eyes and threw her hands up in the air, her frustration palpable.
“It’s not just the bow tie! It’s... everything. I mean you’ve got assets, you’re just not... showcasing them.”
“...assets?” Rose couldn’t help asking, and Amy raised an eyebrow.
“Oh you should see him naked. No really!”
Rose could feel her jaw drop as she stared incredulously at them both, barely registering River’s low chuckle.
“I’m sorry, what?”
Rory - that Rose had almost forgotten - coughed.
“He... was getting changed in a hurry, and there was nowhere to... well... And Amy...”
“Amy-” the girl in question cut in, “-doesn’t turn her back on a free show!”
Before Rose could think of an even half appropriate response to this, a dull, ominous clanging rang out.
She turned to her Doctor and they looked at each other in alarm, but the New Doctor merely held up a finger as if he’d been expecting this, and then proved that apparently he was incapable of speaking in anything except riddles as he smiled:
“And there we are. Five minutes to Belgium!”
Chapter 3.
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I have no idea who half these people are and I an still highly entertained by all of this. Thanks for sharing this.
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LOL!
I am right there with you Rose.
Oh good!
I have no idea who half these people are and I an still highly entertained by all of this. Thanks for sharing this.
How much Doctor Who have you watched btw? (I am trying to work out your level of baffledness...) But - thank you for giving it a try anyway. :)
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Actually watched, uhm, I haven't finished the first season. (People keep waving shiny new fandoms at me and one of them took really well as it contains a 'bastard woobie in a pretentious coat'-in-training.)
If we're talking about spoilage, uhm all the way through the series, since I'm not exactly trying to avoid any of it. I might not get specifics, but I knew enough to have a slight clue who everyone is, just not enough to know all their motivations
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Okay... Well at least you know who the Doctor and Rose are (even though Ten is still to come). :)
People keep waving shiny new fandoms at me and one of them took really well as it contains a 'bastard woobie in a pretentious coat'-in-training.
And which one might that be? *is curious* (Also, you really need to get to Ten, in DW, because oh, he can give Angel a run for his money...)
If we're talking about spoilage, uhm all the way through the series, since I'm not exactly trying to avoid any of it. I might not get specifics, but I knew enough to have a slight clue who everyone is, just not enough to know all their motivations
Righty-ho. This fic is pretty AU anyway (/understatement), so take everything with a grain of salt, except the characteriasations.)
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Righty-ho. This fic is pretty AU anyway (/understatement), so take everything with a grain of salt, except the characteriasations.)
Well I have yet to be disappointed about your characterisations, so we're pretty well set.
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Have fun, and I hope he behaves. :)
Well I have yet to be disappointed about your characterisations, so we're pretty well set.
Aw, thank you!
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Loving this so much -- it's the best kind of crack,ever!
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My pleasure Ma'am. :)
Loving this so much -- it's the best kind of crack,ever!
Thanks! It sure is fun to write... *g*
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So how much do I love River here being all River-y? And poor 10 having to take off his jacket for Amy. And Rose, being quietly glad he doctor didn't regenerate that time. Hee!
This is so much fun
now off to my actual morning...
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Well, obviously!
So how much do I love River here being all River-y?
*grins* She truly is made of awesome! (And I even managed to shock her!)
And poor 10 having to take off his jacket for Amy.
Seems only fair...
And Rose, being quietly glad he doctor didn't regenerate that time. Hee!
Indeed - I can't see Eleven and Rose clicking in the same way that she and Ten did. (Or she and Nine, for that matter.)
This is so much fun
That's pretty much my entire reason for writing it.
Thank you for commenting, and I hope your actual morning brings you more good things.
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I think this may be my favorite Clone!10 and Rose meets 11 fic that I've ever found. And it's CRACK, but it's not STUPID crack, or OUT OF CHARACTER crack, it's WELL WRITTEN crack! It has so many things that I would've liked to happen between the "two eras" meeting each other... and by golly you have Eleven's voice down REALLY well.
favorite bits:
River -duh
the "Raggedy Doctor" - oh my god THAT was brilliant, I never thought about that ever happening, but what a perfect way to start explaining regeneration! And the look on Amy and Rory's faces! (speaking of which, Rory's responses were perfect too... .and Amy's) wait til' Ten learns that Amy's got a collection of dolls with his clothes on XD
He's a fox, you're a geography professor - of COURSE Amy would think that XD
Radiation - AGAIN!? yeah, really, sorry Ten. Oh and I love their interactions so far, most people have them hate each other. Sure it's still awkward but the Doctor was fond being him.
The "naked" thing - is it worse or better for rose to know that BOTH Amy and Rory have seen him naked?
Basically I loved it all.
By the way, I love that you had the people traveling on the TARDIS be the Doctor, Amy, Rory, and River. Doctor/Amy/Rory has been my OT3 all series but with River in the Pandorica, it's kind of become OT4 *ignoring the fact River and Rory haven't really interacted*
...don't tell me they blew another Belgium-sized black hole?
Keep it up! I look forward to the next installment!
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*laughs* I don't think my fic has ever done that before! I am exceedingly thrilled!
I think this may be my favorite Clone!10 and Rose meets 11 fic that I've ever found. And it's CRACK, but it's not STUPID crack, or OUT OF CHARACTER crack, it's WELL WRITTEN crack!
Thank you! *beams* It's not fun, if it isn't good, if that makes sense?
It has so many things that I would've liked to happen between the "two eras" meeting each other... and by golly you have Eleven's voice down REALLY well.
Well it's just me ticking things off my own little internal list, so lets hope it keeps corresponding to yours. *g* And Eleven is fabulous to write. (I love him SO MUCH, but he is as little tricky.)
River -duh
'Cause she's the goddam River Song!
the "Raggedy Doctor" - oh my god THAT was brilliant, I never thought about that ever happening, but what a perfect way to start explaining regeneration! And the look on Amy and Rory's faces! (speaking of which, Rory's responses were perfect too... .and Amy's)
I can't remember when I thought of it, but I nearly hit myself over the head because it worked so well. :)
wait til' Ten learns that Amy's got a collection of dolls with his clothes on XD
... I'll get on that!
He's a fox, you're a geography professor - of COURSE Amy would think that XD
*points to icon*
Radiation - AGAIN!? yeah, really, sorry Ten.
Oh yeah, Eleven is NO TALKING about his death, no sir!
Oh and I love their interactions so far, most people have them hate each other. Sure it's still awkward but the Doctor was fond being him.
I've never actually read another fic where they meet each other, but I can't see why they'd hate each other - unless of course Eleven tries to 'steal' ROse, which I can't see him trying to do. Ever. There *will* be a certain clash of personalities though, but for very different reasons. Also I just love them BOTH to tiny pieces...
The "naked" thing - is it worse or better for rose to know that BOTH Amy and Rory have seen him naked?
Well Rory did turn his back, I presume. Although the Doctor doesn't appear to have much of a problem with nudity ("You're *naked*!" "Oh yes!" &hearts theDoctorDonna)
Basically I loved it all.
I gathered. This is the most fun feedback ever. :)
By the way, I love that you had the people traveling on the TARDIS be the Doctor, Amy, Rory, and River. Doctor/Amy/Rory has been my OT3 all series but with River in the Pandorica, it's kind of become OT4 *ignoring the fact River and Rory haven't really interacted*
Oh it had to be all 4. I love the TARDIS being full of people! :)
...don't tell me they blew another Belgium-sized black hole?
Oh absolutely. Next chapter will be about three lines long, and they all die! ;)
And more as and when time permits, promise. I've yet to write my review of The Pandorica Opens...
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Well Rory did turn his back, I presume. Although the Doctor doesn't appear to have much of a problem with nudity ("You're *naked*!" "Oh yes!" ♥ theDoctorDonna)
He did, eventually, but i'm under then impression he'd kinda already for the most part stripped down by the time Rory turned his back... plus when he was trying to get Amy to turn he kinda kept glancing back. *shrug* I also love that the Doctor doesn't seem to give a damn if people see him naked if the situation calls for it. "turn around if it embarrasses you" indeed. It's refreshing since alot of times in shows it's like, made into some big deal or something XP. Plus as you said "it suits someone so cerebral" (I read all your reviews)
Speaking of DoctorDonna, I can't help but wonder how clone!Ten would react if he knew of Donna's fate, would he agree with real!Ten's decision? Or be upset.... he *does* have bits of Donna's personality after all, and Donna DEFINITELY didn't want a memory wipe. Also, had it been Eleven that Donna was traveling with, not Ten, I get the feeling that perhaps Eleven might've let Donna choose her own fate, Eleven doesn't seem as unhealthily obsessed (I can't blame Ten for it though) with keeping everyone alive after all, merely tries to make a positive difference in peoples lives, as evidenced by Vincent & the Doctor.
... I'll get on that!
*laugh* I'll hold you to it. Ten (and Rose) are probably gonna be so disturbed.... and Amy mortified.
Another thing, when Rose noticed that Eleven wasn't quite as hung up on that underlying lonliness that Ten exhibited, all I could think was "Oh but he does, he's just started to move on a bit past that.... and he's also just gotten better at hiding it"
Oh absolutely. Next chapter will be about three lines long, and they all die! ;)
Please tell me you're joking, the Pandorica Opens already gave me a near heart attack with everyone either dead or facing a fate worse than death. And besides, three lines is way too short!
Plus I wanna see River/clone!Ten interaction too.
I gathered. This is the most fun feedback ever. :)
I hope you're not just saying that, o_O Sorry, I just keep going on and on and.... *shakes head*
*laugh* I have a life outside of fandom too, so I know it can be busy. Take your time, just don't give up on it!
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Heee, shipping himself! Yes, that is very true, but less creepy than when he was Ten. *g* And I think he does enjoy being match maker and seeing people being happy. Partly, maybe, because he now has River. (But that is an essay I'm not going to embark on right now...)
I also love that the Doctor doesn't seem to give a damn if people see him naked if the situation calls for it. "turn around if it embarrasses you" indeed. It's refreshing since alot of times in shows it's like, made into some big deal or something XP. Plus as you said "it suits someone so cerebral" (I read all your reviews)
Awww, thank you. And yes, the attitude to nudity is nice, something that goes back to Capt Jack... ("Ladies - your viewing figures just went up!")
Speaking of DoctorDonna, I can't help but wonder how clone!Ten would react if he knew of Donna's fate, would he agree with real!Ten's decision?
I will sort of touch on this. (Did you ever read What are you? What will you be? - it could really be seen as a prequel to this story, except it's not cracky, just full of meta.)
Also, had it been Eleven that Donna was traveling with, not Ten, I get the feeling that perhaps Eleven might've let Donna choose her own fate, Eleven doesn't seem as unhealthily obsessed (I can't blame Ten for it though) with keeping everyone alive after all, merely tries to make a positive difference in peoples lives, as evidenced by Vincent & the Doctor.
It's a tricky question, isn't it? I don't have an answer to be honest, although I very much agree that Eleven is far more pragmatic than Ten (POOR TEN!).
*laugh* I'll hold you to it. Ten (and Rose) are probably gonna be so disturbed.... and Amy mortified.
I'll see what I can do.
Another thing, when Rose noticed that Eleven wasn't quite as hung up on that underlying lonliness that Ten exhibited, all I could think was "Oh but he does, he's just started to move on a bit past that.... and he's also just gotten better at hiding it"
Oh yes. But he has moved on a lot, I think, and also the domestic setup that TenToo and Rose have now would make him run screaming in the other direction... *g* (But I'll actually deal with Eleven/Rose later on!)
Please tell me you're joking, the Pandorica Opens already gave me a near heart attack with everyone either dead or facing a fate worse than death. And besides, three lines is way too short!
I am INCAPABLE of writing short fic, so don't you worry. :)
Plus I wanna see River/clone!Ten interaction too.
It'll probably consist mostly of Eleven hovering over them going 'SH! Spoilers'... ;)
I hope you're not just saying that, o_O Sorry, I just keep going on and on and.... *shakes head*
Are you kidding? Feedback is like... chocolate and crack rolled up into one - delicious beyond words and utterly addictive. Also, a lot of thought generally goes into writing a story, so someone bothering to sit down and address all the things that went into it is the Best Thing Ever. (Not that a 'Nice story' isn't a lovely comment either, mind you.) But still, looong comments make a writer's spirit soar! :)
*laugh* I have a life outside of fandom too, so I know it can be busy. Take your time, just don't give up on it!
It's more that I WANT to write and then can't... ::tears self away from computer::
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I'd never read that up until just now and I'm glad you showed me the link. And for someone like me, crack-fic is terribly fun, but meta-fic is usually what grabs me most often, stuff that has the characters themselves discuss or confront issues that the show itself doesn't have time for. I'm not up to reviewing the whole thing but I loved the references to the Doctor's past, especially the way-back past like his life on Gallifrey or Susan (surely it throws people for a loop that he's been a grandfather for centuries). Oh, I also loved clone!Ten interacting with Jackie, since now that Donna is part of his personality he can hold his ground. I never thought that maybe clone!Ten could have a mental connection to Donna. The Doctor, yeah, maybe, but I don't know why it didn't cross my mind for Donna to have the same...
If that fic is a prequel to this one, it certainly could make for interesting situations, if possibly uncomfortable, cuz that would mean clone!Ten is aware that the Doctor memory wiped Donna, leaving for the possibility of the subject being breached. Course now it makes me want to see Eleven look at his clone and have some sort of emotion evoked in him because he's all the Doctor has left of Donna as he knew her. Course that would turn this fic into a meta/crack fic XD. Oh look at me running my mouth off XP.
I'll see what I can do.
Hey, its your fic, do what you want and I won't complain since it's turning out great. I'm just being me XD.
also the domestic setup that TenToo and Rose have now would make him run screaming in the other direction..
Funny you mention that because Eleven seems a bit more open minded towards Domestics than Ten initially was (or is that all in my head?)... even though he utterly and completely fails horribly at it. Since you mentioned it I want to say that I like people analyzing how Eleven has progressed from Ten, even though it's all still in there somewhere.
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Actually River/Eleven (or River/Doctor) is something else I'll touch on... (I love crack fic - you can put in a ton of meta without people noticing. *g*)
I'd never read that up until just now and I'm glad you showed me the link. And for someone like me, crack-fic is terribly fun, but meta-fic is usually what grabs me most often, stuff that has the characters themselves discuss or confront issues that the show itself doesn't have time for.
Clearly we are twins! *loves meta fic best of all*
I'm not up to reviewing the whole thing but I loved the references to the Doctor's past, especially the way-back past like his life on Gallifrey or Susan (surely it throws people for a loop that he's been a grandfather for centuries).
Actually - to jump sideways for a moment - that's one of the things I love most about Eleven: He feels like a grandfather. As for the fic then I had a blast cramming in as many references to the past as I could... Oh, and thanks for reading, and I'm glad you liked it!
Oh, I also loved clone!Ten interacting with Jackie, since now that Donna is part of his personality he can hold his ground.
I adored writing that!
I never thought that maybe clone!Ten could have a mental connection to Donna. The Doctor, yeah, maybe, but I don't know why it didn't cross my mind for Donna to have the same...
Oh, that's canon:
THE NEW DOCTOR: Because you're special.
DONNA (exasperated): Oh, I keep telling you: I'm not.
THE NEW DOCTOR (simply): No, but you are, you... (looks at her as if he's only just realised) Oh... you really don't believe that, do you? (gestures his head) I can see, Donna... what you're thinking. All that attitude, all that lip, 'cos all this time... you think you're not worth it.
Course now it makes me want to see Eleven look at his clone and have some sort of emotion evoked in him because he's all the Doctor has left of Donna as he knew her. Course that would turn this fic into a meta/crack fic XD. Oh look at me running my mouth off XP.
That... is possibly a step too meta! *g* Although Donna will certainly be brought up. *waves hands around* I have about 5 million ideas, and am still trying to work out how to fit them all in and what kind of plot I can manage to fit it all around.
Funny you mention that because Eleven seems a bit more open minded towards Domestics than Ten initially was (or is that all in my head?)... even though he utterly and completely fails horribly at it.
Hmmm. Yes and no. I think Ten is more *human* (TenToo certainly), but Eleven is less intense about things, more patient. I dunno. It's a hot day, my brain is fried.
Since you mentioned it I want to say that I like people analyzing how Eleven has progressed from Ten, even though it's all still in there somewhere.
Timelords are like onions! \o/
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The Raggedy Doctor bit made me smile too.
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Yay! I'm so glad you think so! :)
I love seeing Rose's reactions to Amy and River.
It's great trying to contrast the different dynamics, esp because they're all pretty strong, determined people.
And there is Rory! Yay, Rory!
*cheers muchly for Rory* Couldn't leave him out. Oh no.
The Raggedy Doctor bit made me smile too.
Aw, thank you. It made me smile too when it occurred to me. Also thank you for reading & commenting - it means a lot!
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ANYWAY.
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH AND IT'S EVERYTHING I KNEW IT WOULD BE AND I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING IT!!!!!!!!!
All the interactions are just pitch perfect, and I adore how Amy and River start picking on Eleven for not being as, hehe, sexy of a dresser as Ten. ;D And I about died when Eleven had Ten remove his jacket so he'd be more raggedy!Doctor and Amy and Rory would believe him. LOL!! That was awesome!
Oh man, I just am loving this. There are so many things that could go wrong and so much potential for extreme awkwardness and yet undoubtedly the makings of PURE WIN and TOTAL AWESOMENESS.
MORE PLEASE! :D
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Oh don't apologise! I know perfectly well what RL can be like!
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH AND IT'S EVERYTHING I KNEW IT WOULD BE AND I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING IT!!!!!!!!!
*laughs* THANK YOU FOR READING AND BEING ALL CAPS-LOCKLY-Y!!!!
All the interactions are just pitch perfect, and I adore how Amy and River start picking on Eleven for not being as, hehe, sexy of a dresser as Ten. ;D
'Tis the truth. And I think they enjoy ganging up on him... ;)
And I about died when Eleven had Ten remove his jacket so he'd be more raggedy!Doctor and Amy and Rory would believe him. LOL!! That was awesome!
I felt *so* clever when I thought of that!
Oh man, I just am loving this. There are so many things that could go wrong and so much potential for extreme awkwardness and yet undoubtedly the makings of PURE WIN and TOTAL AWESOMENESS.
LOL! This is why it's crack!fic - I won't allow anything to go horribly wrong!
MORE PLEASE! :D
As soon as I can, promise. :)
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I could totally hear all of the characters, but Amy is especially fabulous. :)
The clothes bit is great. I never got that before.
I've always thought Ten's hair made him look a bit like a peacock. ;)
Loved the sneak-in Buffy line (you should see him naked, no really).
Is Belgium a H2G2 reference? Or is it just me?
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I went back and edited that line (originally it had him as Williams), since after that finale I couldn't not! :D
I could totally hear all of the characters, but Amy is especially fabulous. :)
Amy *insists* on being fabulous, otherwise she won't participate!
I've always thought Ten's hair made him look a bit like a peacock. ;)
That or a rooster!
Loved the sneak-in Buffy line (you should see him naked, no really).
I *HAD* to, once I'd thought of it. B/c it's so Amy!
Is Belgium a H2G2 reference? Or is it just me?
Time Crash, although it's entirely possible that the Moff put it in as a H2G2 reference. :)
Also - yay! You like it! \o/
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I think I like your Amy best of all, although it's a close call. I always say this, but you are so clever at ensemble writing. It just zings along, and all the time there's that lovely push and pull of character dynamics playing out underneath it.
On to part three!
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That's EXACTLY the right response!
I think I like your Amy best of all, although it's a close call.
Oh I love my Amy too. She absolutely wrote herself btw.
I always say this, but you are so clever at ensemble writing. It just zings along, and all the time there's that lovely push and pull of character dynamics playing out underneath it.
Aw, thank you. I never think of myself as someone who writes ensemble stories, and always worry that I'm leaving someone out, but mostly I just enjoy throwing people together and see them spark. Esp when they share some things and not others. (Yes, my articulate is broken tonight...)
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LOL awesome! Off to read more and then will post your icons for you :)
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*beams* Thank you! I swear, it just writes itself. (And oh, Eleven's fashion sense...)
LOL awesome! Off to read more and then will post your icons for you :)
Squee! \o/