Wow! I'm just ... wow! Can see loads of ideas and themes zinging around the edges of this fic so will be *really* interested to see where you go with this.
He notices the black burn marks on Illyria’s unbreakable hide, and thinks to himself that it’s not fair that vampires are so flammable.
Awww! Poor Angel, always looking for the downside of that whole immortal gig!
Sorry about the present tense, I'm afraid it couldn't be helped.
Ahhhh, we've all done it! fun isn't it?